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a delicate white prance of thought (the bride wore brambles)
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a delicate white prance of thought (the bride wore brambles) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I heard the flute answer the pipe and my horse was discontent frigid spirit malcontent clamouring the turf and cliffs did not bother her--she knew the path from where the goats were led and so I dropped the reigns and let her take me down the steep incline to the fields where hay was bound by the fiercest of them fought: the men had bound them tight tonight. A delicate white prance of thought as if these cloven feet were silk tied in pink for innocence and the burden on her back was nothing but a mere bustle following the way... as the dogs all greeted us wagging tail rememberance and not a warning barked because our scent was reassurance and the dogs, they knew the cost of it-- soldiers, nudging each other telegraphing "admittance" as I slid ephereal torn in places gossamer shreds against the brambling branches reaching for my legs to pull me down from my pale horse whispered with the scratchings "stay"... so I sang the flute and slid down the side into a box that played chimes in cylinder and 'ere the notes that played was this: the answer of the pipes a kiss from the groom unto his wife veiled by journey's mysteries and scarred forever by the life that led her straight to him. * * * note to Michael Anderson--I took your pale horse for a spin. Hope you don't mind.  [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (01-30-2007 08:52 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If Michael could inspire someone he would say, well done... and you had me all the way to the capture of the little tune in the music box.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I never can think of anything good enough to say about your stuff but know, I do read with my mouth dropping in awe, eyes never blinking |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I feel tears in my heart with this, Ser. Leaves me speeches, really. LY....jojo |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
clamouring the turf and cliffs did not bother her--she knew the path from where the goats were led And the path of the goats always depends on the goat herder yes? I think I can relate.... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
wow...what a wonderful read...taking us with you down this wonderful flight of fancy...beautiful in form and pointed in direction...wow...just wow!!! I only had time to read one in the middle of this busy day...glad it was this one... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your writings are like mysterious lights illuminating night, you inhabit memories and events interpreting their secrets and I can picture the person depicting spirit, belief and do diligence of observations...marvelous write, unpredictable and profound!!! |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hi you! I feel like we just rode double through a dream, and I don't really feel like waking. It is a compliment to Michael's work, that you took his pony for a ride, and our pleasure you did. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Do you have any idea how amazing your writing is? How beautiful you are? In the midst of winter, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww and no I don't know how beautiful I are--TELL ME.  Thank you for reading-this is one of those "I dunno where it came from" poems--but it's my very favorite thing when I get lost while writing, so thanks for reading it. Love to all.  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
When my brain gets untangled I'll say more. Until then you'll have to settle for ... Well done Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen....what a ride...full of color and texture and those surprising rhymes that are your trademark...and a story as well. Wonderful!! |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is one of those pieces of poetry where when one reads it, the jaw drops, the eyes follow the imagery, the body feels everything happening, and the heart goes Ohhhh....and sighs deeply. If ever a standing ovation were deserved, it is now. Brava!  Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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