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steavenr
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0 posted 2007-01-29 01:54 PM


of silent gusts from wind-swept wisps of passing time
to stillness as it lays in muted tombs of calm repose
so rests the soul whose breadth and depths sublime
bequeath its essence bare to tranquility’s closest floes

and bids the stillness of that calm to gently ride the night
and branch the rampage of its course to segregate
its force into quiet streams and rivulets of light
that curtail the resonant finger-like stems that stimulate

the heart to breath, exhaling, inhaling, breathing deep within
swallowing life and all its schemes, love and all its dreams
quietly, calmly, supposing the stillness calm, but then
ebbs as waters abate while morning moonlight dis-enbeams

disenchantment’s dreams



© Copyright 2007 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2007-01-29 01:58 PM


whew, this was engrossing and gave me chills, very well done
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2 posted 2007-01-30 12:40 PM


The pacing and tone of this, almost like an incantation....perfect for the message. Well done!

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iliana
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3 posted 2007-01-30 01:57 AM


Masterful writing IMO........saving it.  
Sunshine
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4 posted 2007-01-30 07:14 AM


and bids the stillness of that calm to gently ride the night
...
the heart to breath, exhaling, inhaling, breathing deep within
...

my two favorite lines.  Thank you, Sir.



passing shadows
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5 posted 2007-01-30 07:31 AM


the title caught me..the rest will hold me all day
ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2007-01-31 12:19 PM


This reminded me of a river, flowing through time. Outstanding write.
TD

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7 posted 2007-01-31 12:41 PM


a feel of the older style in this poem which is right up my alley major kudos you did a nice job
The Lady
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8 posted 2007-02-01 12:37 PM



awesome work


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