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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2007-01-25 07:23 PM


Rewrite:


My Creation

My creation, an art a point
Illusion of a minds anoint
The whisper of a moment’s dare
A pixel of the way I care

Aphasia of our common sense
A light that looks for recompense
The spirit of a phantoms course
A giving of my soul its source

It is a statement made by you
As beautiful as mornings dew
An act that plays upon times stage
An addendum an added page

It is a force of raging fire
Unclear to see with much of mire
A stirring up of inter core
An opening of chaos door

A place I often go in dream
A place I keep my own harem



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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2007-01-25 07:37 PM


Dear Sonneteering Sultan ~

I be one who'd delight in being a part of your "harem".

Even if you could not speak, your pen would contine to eloquently speak for you.

Loving hug,
EA


SmartChick
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2 posted 2007-01-25 08:00 PM


I just love to read your creations.
Enchantress
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3 posted 2007-01-25 08:02 PM


A wonderful write dear Sy!
May I join your harem too?
& , Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

The Lady
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4 posted 2007-01-25 08:19 PM



seems everyone would like to
join your harem Sir Sy

I am no exception...

sewasham
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5 posted 2007-01-25 08:30 PM


Always a pleasure to read your well flowing writes. Take care and Have fun. Steve


Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2007-01-25 08:53 PM


Earth Angel,
LOL you are already in my dream harem.

SmartChick,
And I love for you to read them.

Nancy,
Why you were one of the first.

Lady
It would be my pleasure.

sewasham
As you can see from the above, I try my best
LOL

MGROVES
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7 posted 2007-01-25 10:20 PM


I would love to be part of that harem

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2007-01-25 11:36 PM


MGROVES
You were always in.

Sunshine
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9 posted 2007-01-25 11:50 PM



An artiste's point is pure delight
a point au prints in sum, some nights
a care du pont of quickened heights
a shine to shadow the darkest nights...

paint away, m'friend!




Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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10 posted 2007-01-26 04:52 AM


Sir Sy.... oh my, oh my!!  just wonderful!     RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2007-01-26 08:02 AM


Sunshine,
I'll do my best.

RDB,
Thank you for your wonderful reply.

LeeJ
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12 posted 2007-01-26 09:31 AM


oh, oh, (waving hand in the air frantically) can I be part of the herum to?  Oh polizzzeeee?  

Great write dear Sy

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2007-01-26 09:37 AM


LeeJ
Only if you take me with you in one of your dreams.

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14 posted 2007-01-26 03:31 PM


Seymour~

From behind a mask
of silken smile
I would dance
within your wile~

Ah, to only be a part
of the harem of your heart~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -             noles1@totcon.com

MGROVES
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15 posted 2007-01-26 03:38 PM


thankyou ~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Kethry
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16 posted 2007-01-26 03:46 PM


I don't know what this was before
but echoes of it roll to my door
it has a certain style and flair
but with you that's always there

I don't know what it was before
but your words leave me dumb, word poor
because you write with elegance
that speaks loud of your eloquence

everything you write and say
has memories of another day
where reading you, my daily brew
made me well content with you

and all the things you showed me of
were penned in pages blue with love
so how do I do less than this
I seal this answer with my bliss

and say I've heard this once before
but still it leaves me wanting more.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2007-01-26 05:10 PM


Marge,
But you are a part of the harem of my heart.


MGROVES
No I you.

Kethry,
This is as elegant as it gets.
thank you.

ivordavies
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18 posted 2007-01-26 05:19 PM



A place I often go in dream
A place I keep my own harem
Where in the shadow of my rhyme
Springs poetry to join with mine

In whispers of a moments dare
Entwined within the soul we share.

Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 2007-01-26 06:10 PM


ivor,
Yes I believe the Hindu religion believes in the one soul. Thank you for a wonderful reply.

vandana
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20 posted 2007-01-26 07:18 PM


good read
Seymour Tabin
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21 posted 2007-01-26 07:42 PM


vandana
Thank you dear.

miscellanea
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22 posted 2007-01-26 07:54 PM


Seymour,

   It's such a treat to read your poetry once again.  It is always music to my ears.
Two lines keep repeating themselves to me:

  "A stirring up of inter core
  An opening of chaos door"

Enjoyed immensely!

miscellanea



Seymour Tabin
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23 posted 2007-01-26 10:17 PM


miscellanea
Good lines I like them to. Thank you

MGROVES
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24 posted 2007-01-26 10:22 PM


love ya

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Seymour Tabin
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25 posted 2007-01-26 11:17 PM


MGROVES,
Too

Beatrice Boyle
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26 posted 2007-01-27 01:31 AM




I'm taking belly dancing lessions Sy...got room for one more?  

Bea

Seymour Tabin
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27 posted 2007-01-27 08:26 AM


Bea,
You betcha.

passing shadows
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28 posted 2007-01-27 09:50 AM


I don't know how in the world this one got past me

but hopefully you'll allow the late-sleepers to join?

Seymour Tabin
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29 posted 2007-01-27 11:28 AM


passing,
Never turned one down yet. LOL

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