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Open Poetry #40

Who Do You Love?

howardtsu
Senior Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 678

0 posted 2007-01-25 12:51 PM

                       even more than the Black Eyed Peas

                                         sex sells

and your Fergie like body is definitely vexing me with spells

that's making me wish i was your ex with a collection of erotic memories

delicious enough to entice you into re-thinking your decision

                     to dwell with your friendly Lex Luthor

                  after you told me i couldn't tutor your heart

but why does he get to walk around with you like he's your suitor

                            while your husband's the upstart

still, that didn't give me the right

                           to repeatedly dream up ways

to beam up praise from your luscious lips no matter how light

                                   my intentions were

                                                                       love,

                                                                      howard

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2007-01-25 03:43 PM

Oh, I like this one. The loose, conversational construction is exactly right.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

howardtsu
Senior Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 678

2 posted 2007-01-27 04:56 PM

thanks pilgrimage

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2007-01-27 06:06 PM

I like this too--

it reads easy, conversational...

"that's making me wish i was your ex with a collection of erotic memories"

THAT made me smile.

I don't believe I ever heard it put that way before--quite unique, you.

Much enjoyed.

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