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I wish I had a dog to walk
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I wish I had a dog to walk |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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I wish I had a dog to walk I wish I had a dog to walk or some excuse but a dog would do a dog to walk and I could name him worthless or some other nonchalant descriptor walk my worthless and not see these concretes like a wall laid down to be a one-lane chessboard of forever dog and not think square and concrete days not care what my worthless would do on certain days or not on others never if I coaxed a dog then I could feel the sun sometimes all filtered by the breeze the stray warm scents and traffic sounds I wish I had and I could name him not pick up his kibbles nor his drips a wish and I could walk and when he died I wouldn’t miss him at least not like now |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader You've tossed the symbols on the floor But still can't joule the evermore. Enjoyed the read. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"walk my worthless and not see these concretes like a wall laid down to be a one-lane chessboard of forever" I enjoyed this greatly |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool piece |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think you'd best leash a cat... for a dog would have empathy and nose the miseries away; a dog would pounce at butterflies and crack a grin at your lopsided look at foolishness... he would guide you to a never-never lane where concrete slabs never existed. Yes, you'd best leash a cat...  Oh, I've had days like yours.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
walk my worthless and not see these concretes like a wall laid down to be a one-lane chessboard of forever dog and not think square and concrete days not care what my worthless would do on certain days or not on others  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RatMan~ There is such a wistful sadness here~ *HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Coming back to smile you up~  How's about A Carrot Named Earl ? /pip/Forum103/HTML/000419.html *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ Email - noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed... If I had a dog named Precious I'd walk her til her name was Sniffer and leave her nose in clumps of ivy her sound of sniffing by the rose then after filtering so much air she'd take away my old despair and bring me new back home |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ed, It's great to read your poetry once again! (Shucks, I wish I could read it more!) There has never been a time I've read your poetry that your imagery hasn't evoked an emotional reaction from me. You always land me into a pool of quandry! Be well. miscellanea |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
dogs are better than cats!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
tell you what...my dog just had puppies...I'll email you one so life can be complete...any favorite color?  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Turquoise....just couldn't bear to have a dog that was any other color! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
The last line, to me, was the main ingredient in this one. Very very touching write. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Turquoise....just couldn't bear to have a dog that was any other color! You made me laugh today, Ed..I needed that. I loved my afghan although I couldn't walk her ( she would walk me) I am tempted to get another but not sure I would be fair since I am never home anymore to spend time with a dog. hugs M |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ed darling man, ah you have such a way with words, always have and always will. You even made me miss my dog and she has been gone a long, long time. Although now of course I can’t walk very far so I couldn’t walk her. Darling man you really do have an amazing talent, love the flow, it is simply divine. Sorry I’m not here more, but life always seems to get in the way. Well, university gets in the way, but if I ever wish to become a writer I have to finish the course so I am, but oh it is so much harder when they keep throwing Haiku at me. I have tried to steer them onto other forms but it isn’t working. C’est la vie, so until the next time I cheer myself up with a little bit of real poetic genius. as always Mushy x x x x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is fantastic. Have you been taking lessons? Would you give me some? I absolutely love this one. Name him worthless indeed. And I have to admit Sunshine is right. worthless would have you laughing at his antics, and he'd nose at you when you were down, and you wouldn't have to write poetry anymore. I think dogs probably prevent poetry. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well now, until I saw that you were going to call the dog worthless, I was going to let you have one of mine. But, my dog is not worthless. She is alot of company. And, she has a name. But, it isn't Worthless. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
At first, I thought implosion... but that's inaccurate... You show us a slow, painful disintegration... where one keeps trying to keep the bricks in place but the walls fall anyway... and the greatest fear is that tomorrow will be exactly the same. Absolutely fantastic!!! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
a wish and I could walk and when he died I wouldn’t miss him at least not like now ---- Just ... you grabbed me And you can borrow one of mine any old day. A |
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IntoTheRain Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 51Westwood, CA |
nice to see you've still got that poetic touch. really enjoyed this one, well done |
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