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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2007-01-24 10:27 AM


Rewrite:

The Moon

Where is that ghost of circles light?
That host that lit my phantoms night
That ghostly lavaliere of sky
Where does it hide, where does it lie?

No moon of magic can I find
Could it be I’m going blind?
Yet I know it still glows gold
Could it be I’m growing old?

Where is that moon I used to know?
That shined a phantoms fancies glow
That fired all that alchemy
That set my heart and minds a spree?

It wears a shroud a lace of web
It airs a cloud of subtle ebb
It’s turned from gold to silvers glare
Chilled of ice and gray of wear

I’m dancing me a tenuous rhyme
As sands slip down to end my time

© Copyright 2007 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2007-01-24 10:28 AM


aw Sey, you are immortal in our hearts sir. and this is another fine write.  Hugs you.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2007-01-24 01:17 PM


Dear Sy..you, getting old?
Never!
Come we shall find the light of the silvery moon together.
& , Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
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right...there
3 posted 2007-01-24 03:51 PM


This is a keeper Sy.  Well done!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2007-01-24 05:24 PM


Sir Sy.... just wonderful - just like you!!   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2007-01-24 08:11 PM


Gentle Spirit
You are indeed a gentle spirit.

Nancy,
Its lost the luster of its shine
And interaction of its wine.
Thank you dear.

scorpio
Thank you my friend.

RDB,
You are kind indeed.

The Lady
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6 posted 2007-01-24 10:17 PM



no mere moon could outshine you
Sir Sy

beautiful...

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2007-01-24 11:00 PM


Lady
You are a dear lady.

ivordavies
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Chester, England
8 posted 2007-01-24 11:12 PM


The Moon shines brightly in that place
where poets meet with charm and grace
To pass the wisdom of the time
in perfect poetry in rhyme

Your Moon shines brightly with the tides
that carry us along your rides
when taken to fantastic shores
where from your pen pure magic pours.

The Sun and Moon come out to play
to brighten up our every day
whenever Seymour has his say
we'll learn a little more that day.

Seymour,

It is 4am in the morning here and I'm in a hotel 300 miles from home ready to hold a meeting tomorrow, couldn't sleep and would thank you for a little (moon)light relief in the middle of the night!

Ivor

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2007-01-25 07:52 AM


Ivor
Your reply was as good as my poem. Thank you and have a good one tomorrow.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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10 posted 2007-01-25 08:50 AM


Seymour,
you are the best of the best...you give us older folks, dignity and reason for rhyme...wonderfully rich and wise you are...


Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
11 posted 2007-01-25 09:33 AM


LeeJ
Thank you my dear you are a sweetheart.
Have a good one.

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