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ivordavies
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0 posted 2007-01-23 05:19 PM



Testing Time


This truly is a testing time,
when all around seek cause to find,
something wrong with everything,
that come out from my mouth or mind.

So easy now to let them win,
and join their game… retaliate.
Much harder still to stand my ground,
while others seem to plan my fate.

Convincing people they’re not right,
in treating others with contempt,
but try to aim them at the light,
and help their nasty streak repent.

I may not win this fragile fight
to change the ways of those I meet,
who’s presence leaves an ugly trail,
for this is truly quite a feat.

But if just one should mend their way,
and find within a calmer soul,
so they can help the ones they greet,
and not make hate their only goal.

Then I will claim one battle won
by turning cheek to evil deed,
and helping those who’d put me down,
by perpetrating evil’s seed

But caution guides my every step
when walking close to evil’s gate.
For truly I could scorch my soul,
………….. if tempted to retaliate!

Ivor G Davies

The moment created this second, is a  moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

© Copyright 2007 Ivor G Davies - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2007-01-23 09:51 PM


Ivor,
A good write and I'll send it back to the top for another chance to catch some eye.

Fairplay
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2 posted 2007-01-23 09:51 PM


Nawwwwww It sound like one of those Jehovas things......

Eric

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3 posted 2007-01-23 10:17 PM


I enjoyed the message within this one, as it is so easy to strike back, and takes a bigger person to face the fear of ignorance, and stand back.  It takes time to understand our fellow man, and goodness knows we have it.  Nice write.
The_Nameless_One
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4 posted 2007-01-23 11:34 PM


sticking to this message is so hard to do
if anyone can kudos to you

ivors if you follow this then you are a better person than me

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5 posted 2007-01-24 11:34 AM


Not only is there a good message in the words, the poem is penned in excellent iambic and the structure is flawless. Very good piece of writing, sir.
trutodaraiders
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6 posted 2007-01-24 12:46 PM


Yep..Did a awsome job here.. In form and in meter. I dont know which stanza i like better for they are all great. Good Job!!!
ivordavies
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since 2007-01-10
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Chester, England
7 posted 2007-01-24 10:29 PM


Thank you all for your comments on this, not retaliating is not an easy option and it does not mean you accept the situation.  It means that you have to work sensibly and methodically towards changing attitudes and sometimes overide natural instincts, which of course is the subject of one of my previous posts.

Thanks Again,

Ivor

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