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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2007-01-19 08:21 AM


While Moon Light

While moon light spread a silver spill
And wind chimes rang a sprightly drill
The wake that woke my comatose
Dispelled my dream of grandiose

Took me from a suns September
To a dreary cold December
With frost upon the window pain
Where snow outside for days had lain

I watched a hazy moon ignite
While icy glass defused the light
I heard the rakish clang of chime
That set a funky beat of time

I was annoyed my lost surcease
Whatever had disturbed my peace?
I laid me down my bed of ken
To catch my grandiose again

But all I caught were shards of thought
For I had lost the dreams passport


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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2007-01-19 08:29 AM


Sey, I have so many nights where I awaken and then end up lying awake thinking the rest of the night.  You wrote this so well.  Currently, the sun is shining, but its snowing here, so go figure.      Nice writing, very well done sir Sey.
Earth Angel
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2 posted 2007-01-19 08:46 AM


Good morning, Sir Sonneteer!

Might I say that this poem, m'dear, is a bit of 'sonnetic' perfection and is going straight to my 'Sigh' File!

Gosh, I do so know what you mean about waking up from a "grandiose" dream and not being able to recapture it!

I continue to be impressed, for what that's worth! This poem was expertly scribed, Sir Sigh! Loved your descriptive imagery!

Loves 'n hugs 'n angel kisses,
EA

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2007-01-19 08:47 AM


Ooops! I'd forget my 'wings' if they weren't attached! lol

...SAVED


Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2007-01-19 09:12 AM


You are a dear Gentle Spirit.

Earth Angel
And you are my number one Angel, with or without the wings.


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5 posted 2007-01-19 10:13 AM


Perfectly penned - as usual.
Wonderful Seymour.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
Carl Sandburg

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2007-01-19 10:49 AM


Chris,
Love those hugs.

SmartChick
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7 posted 2007-01-19 12:16 PM


Awwww, I hope you find that dreams passport again. For those dreams are good to have. Because sometimes, that is all that keeps us alive.
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8 posted 2007-01-19 12:25 PM


Doesn't that just tick you off?  I have these dreams I can't mention in here, an just when I get to a good part, the stupid puppy will awaken me licking my eye - and I can't even get mad 'cause she's so darn cute!
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9 posted 2007-01-19 12:26 PM


phone rang at 3:30 this morning, WRONG NUMBER????...and so, I was up, gathering the groans, and recycling them into sounds of silence and thought....

and so, I most certainly can hop along each and every word of yours with understanding...

excellent write...

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2007-01-19 12:26 PM


SmartChick
Yes I do enjoy them when they come.

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2007-01-19 12:29 PM


Sharon,
What ever the cause one they are gone, they are gone.

LeeJ
Thanks for the good vibes have a good one.

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12 posted 2007-01-19 03:37 PM


Another keeper, my friend

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2007-01-19 05:44 PM


Interloper
OK I'll keep it. Thank you for the kind reply.

The Lady
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14 posted 2007-01-19 07:15 PM



Sir Sy

I hope you find your passport
and sweet dreams...


Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2007-01-19 07:53 PM


Lady
Dreams are like flowers they come and go.

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16 posted 2007-01-19 10:07 PM



Were I to be at one with you,
you'd know me, without a clue;
for I would be your dream's transport,
and you'd be there, my laughing sport.

'Tis in these nights where dreams awake,
and I am lost, for goodness' sake,
for between the dream and some twilight,
I believe I am awake all night.

Yet, did I dream, or see image shimmer
was it mirror, or just a glimmer?
Did some shadow cross my path's way
Or did you visit, to simply say....

Welcome, Sunshine, so glad you're here,
Now come and read my poems, dear.



Thank you, m'friend, m'poet, for the inspire.  I don't think I've smiled this wide all day!




Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2007-01-19 11:57 PM


Sunshine
Then I speak to a happy sunshine, thank you my dear.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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18 posted 2007-01-20 05:21 AM


Sir Sy... your dreams passport will be found again tonight perhaps? I could loan you mine if you like?   enjoyed this very much     RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

[This message has been edited by Roniece Dawson-Bruce (01-20-2007 06:31 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 2007-01-20 08:21 AM


RDB ,
That is a very kind offer, thank you so much.

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20 posted 2007-01-23 03:08 PM


Don't you hate that? *S* I always wonder why the interruptions aren't around when I'm having a nightmare... I'd love to lose THAT passport. *S*

Excellent write, my friend! *S*

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21 posted 2007-01-23 03:12 PM


I like this one, Seymour.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Seymour Tabin
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22 posted 2007-01-23 05:47 PM


suthern
Thank you my dear, you have really made up for lost time.

Pilgrimage
That makes me happy.

ivordavies
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23 posted 2007-01-23 07:30 PM


When in your dreams
at dead of night
there's nought should
rouse the inner sight
so take a chime of hammer out
and scatter silence all about!

A moment lost
cannot be gained
when woken from
the sweet refrain
where limbs are young
and nothing hurts
and energy
is not in spurts.
  
The sound of chime
throughout the day
can never be
enough to pay
for journeys on
an ethereal plain,
with passport to
your youth again!

Seymour Tabin
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24 posted 2007-01-23 08:59 PM


ivor,
Your write was a delight and I thank you much. Unfortunatly this dream was not of youthful prime but scraped the edge of older time.

ivordavies
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25 posted 2007-01-25 03:35 PM


Seymour,

As you have probably gathered by now, I love your poetry, it is, however, infectious and I cannot get your 'phrase of turn' out of my head!

Hope you do not mind the couple of replies I have made 'sampling' your catchphrases.  I promise not to do it in future to the extent that it actually becomes a pathetic imitation of a master of his craft.

Imitation of course is the highest form of flattery....

thanks for humouring me thus far....

Have Fun,

Ivor

Seymour Tabin
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26 posted 2007-01-25 03:50 PM


Ivor,
You are very flattering to an old man and I thank you. Feel free to do what ever you wish. Have a good one.

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