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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-01-16 11:10 AM


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A fine white mist
Falls on the street outside

The tires of cars passing by
Make a sound like waves
Washing softly in from sea

Last night
I dreamed a storyline
That slowly faded toward the end

You were there
Is all I know

And now your absence
Fills the room


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trutodaraiders
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1 posted 2007-01-16 11:16 AM


John nice write..I think everyone can relate to being alone..
LeeJ
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2 posted 2007-01-16 12:58 PM


and now your absense fills the room

bittersweet and lovely write

Krishankins
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3 posted 2007-01-16 03:21 PM


Makes the feeling of Monday come, even if it had another name. Nice one!
passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2007-01-16 05:40 PM


there too, huh?

*sigh* at least I know I'm not alone

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just out of reach
5 posted 2007-01-16 07:45 PM


KEEPIN' THIS !!!
Wonderful John.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
Carl Sandburg

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