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trutodaraiders
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since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

0 posted 2007-01-09 02:02 AM

If storm clouds gather around your heart.
and tempests rip your life apart
be sure the maelstrom will subside
and soon you'll see where rainbows hide.

Though now you feel condemned to suffer
for loss of your best friend and lover
a day will come when pain will cease
and you will find contented peace.

All clouds will thin, and drift away
a gentle breeze will come to play
Your pain will cease, your eyes will dry
The sun will blaze across your sky.

When once again you feel secure,
Love's goblin will once more ensure
the sure, swift passage of his dart
to begin a new love in your heart.

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2007-01-09 02:41 AM

Beautiful and insightful...a happy tune

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2007-01-09 03:18 AM

When once again you feel secure,
Love's goblin will once more ensure
the sure, swift passage of his dart
to begin a new love in your heart

ah just beautiful Bill ! RDB

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

3 posted 2007-01-09 03:24 AM

LeeJ And Rdb thanks for the comments..I am starting to struggle on writing poems

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

4 posted 2007-01-09 07:44 AM

Lovely subject and nice Iambic Quadrameter structure. Nicely done, sir.

MoonShadow

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2007-01-09 07:46 AM

very uplifting!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2007-01-09 09:58 AM

Lyrical, poetic, and sweetly inspirational!

A lovely write from your loving heart!

Linda

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

7 posted 2007-01-09 10:04 AM

Beautiful positive thoughts expressed

Hope

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

8 posted 2007-01-09 10:05 AM

Linda, PassingShadow thanks for stopping bye and leaving me comments. Its always hard to tell if my writes are decent or not. Ken thank you kindly for the compliment..

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2007-01-09 12:00 PM

Exquisite! And wonderful form.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

10 posted 2007-01-09 07:16 PM

beautifully done Bill!

Devious Intellectual
Member

since 2006-05-08

Posts 112

11 posted 2007-01-09 07:48 PM

like how you wrote this its kind of like one my styles, very nicely crafted

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