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Daniel James Burt Junior Member
since 2011-05-15
Posts 45ID |
Whispers Her Last Started out as a lark just another of many nothin to it but to do it...ya know? All the pieces in place the studies been done gone over an over an over again. Plan almost perfect nothin left for chance done deal, don't ya know? We dancin thru the steps on that ballroom floor pieces start fallin out, just gone. Never seen it comin pieces of plan shattered blindsided by fate, ya know? Crew bleedin on the floor crawlin for the door plan like mist, settles still. Started out as a lark just another of many gettin it done, don't ya know? Random piece crashes in busts it all to forever lark bloody on the floor, whispers her last... ~~~~~~~~ Daniel James Burt  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You caught my attention and held it. Good job on that - I can be a bit ADD sometimes. Alison |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh my this is stark. Joyce |
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Daniel James Burt Junior Member
since 2011-05-15
Posts 45ID |
thank you for the comments... lol stark...me mrs and i agree Joyce stark may be an accurate description of this one, at least on a few layers. |
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Idaho Pen Junior Member
since 2012-08-20
Posts 16Idaho US |
me thinks there might be more to this lark. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
humm, awakens a memory of the last dance...the music stops... there is a kind of quiet and everyone leaves...i liked the poem and where it took me...thank you... |
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Daniel James Burt Junior Member
since 2011-05-15
Posts 45ID |
you are welcome R V...nice to have someone who "gets me" heheh |
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Daniel James Burt Junior Member
since 2011-05-15
Posts 45ID |
heheh to say robbery gone wrong would only be the first few layers of this onion... [This message has been edited by Daniel James Burt (08-21-2012 06:21 PM).] |
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