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Lisa Fisher
Junior Member
since 2011-02-05
Posts 12
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0 posted 2011-02-06 07:55 AM



I met a man
Who touched my soul
His body young
His heart was old

He could have been
A friend of mine
If, I had, but
Remembered in time

That, lines crossed
Can’t be erased
And so now
I find I face

A loneliness
That runs too deep
For words speak
Or sleep to heal

I am broken
By thoughtlessness
I won a prize
But lost the best.

So now I face
Bleaker days
I had some fun
And now I pay



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Anoo
Member
since 2011-01-23
Posts 55
UK
1 posted 2011-02-13 12:52 PM


I feel a dominating note of regret in your poem. The pain is tangible.It's beautifully written.
Well done

Anoo

Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
2 posted 2011-02-17 03:20 AM


O no I can relate to this so well!! "His body young but his heart was old" he sounds very mysterious!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Lisa Fisher
Junior Member
since 2011-02-05
Posts 12
Vermont
3 posted 2011-02-25 05:54 PM


Thank you, it was a sad time for me.
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