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Novus_Os
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0 posted 2010-07-21 02:43 AM



Bow my head and hit the hay,
live to die another day.
Come misfortune, come dismay,
the bonds now broken, not held at bay.
All consciousness fades, my mind betrays.
The silent rush comes as I lay, and slowly it all
slips away...

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1 posted 2010-07-21 01:48 PM


Firstly, welcome to Passions, and I can see you will be a wonderful addition.

This poem reads almost like a bedtime prayer, and one has to be careful what they wish for it may just come true. Sad but so very true for some.  Well done.


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2 posted 2010-07-21 06:46 PM


I enjoyed reading your poem. Welcome to the site and hope you enjoy it.

Betty Lou

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3 posted 2010-07-25 12:45 PM


A sorrow-filled poem, but one
that could be read on many levels...

Welcome to Passions!

We look forward to more of your writings,
so please, check your Email for a
Very Special Greeting!

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KRJ

easy1
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4 posted 2010-07-25 02:46 AM


Hi Novus_Os... Nice poem!

I notice often that the first "rush" of wakefulness-to-dream-sleep is a rehearsal, usually with a startling dream noise of some sort. That wakes one for the real sleep sequence to start. Very animal atavistic...

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5 posted 2010-07-25 07:23 PM


Great start in our Corner.  Welcome and hope you ejoy it.  Love, Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (07-26-2010 01:28 AM).]

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