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Beasley
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0 posted 2010-01-22 04:32 PM




The baby sky
Wore pink and blue-
A layette of clouds that grew
From a chip of opaque white
That traveled through a wispy sight
Of black-filled gauze
That brushed the face
Of Godly realms
That finger-traced
A night at rest, as was wise,
When daylight opened infant eyes.

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Nicole Victoria
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1 posted 2010-01-22 08:27 PM


I love your use of imagry. great job. I really liked it.
Beasley
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2 posted 2010-01-24 10:30 AM


thank you, Nicole.
Joyce Johnson
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3 posted 2010-01-25 06:55 PM


Very nice descriptive phrases here.  Nice job Barbara.  Love, Joyce
Denise
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4 posted 2010-02-13 09:47 AM


Beautifully written, Barbara! Lovely!
Sunshine
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5 posted 2010-02-13 05:49 PM


Beasley, this is wonderful. I am expecting a new grandchild soon...the seventh...and you have captured the imagery beautifully!


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6 posted 2010-02-14 09:11 PM


Dear Barb:

This is so lovely and imaginative! Great work!

Love
Betty Lou

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Chalmette Guy
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7 posted 2010-02-19 10:08 AM


I like this. Beautiful and the imagery is fantastic.
Joyce Johnson
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8 posted 2010-04-27 01:17 AM


Just read this again and I really love it.  So smoothly written.  Love, Joyce
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