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xCharliexChucklezx
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since 2008-12-14
Posts 5
New Zealand.

0 posted 2008-12-15 12:41 PM


No matter what I hold inside,
You seem to find the things I hide.

You make me smile at every line,
Make me fall with every sigh.

So here we are once again,
These problems you think we can mend.

Lets try again to fix this,
My brokeness sealed with a kiss.

Good luck my love and goodbye,
I hope to see you again to live this lie.

© Copyright 2008 Charlotte Death - All Rights Reserved
Mysteria
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1 posted 2008-12-16 01:02 AM


I too have been through that revolving door, and probably will again.
Anniepimm
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since 2008-12-26
Posts 550
England
2 posted 2008-12-27 04:32 AM


Are the never ending motion of trying again haven't we all been in this situation,
Thank you for the poem it just reminds me why i divorced excellently written

Hope Fleeting
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since 2009-02-23
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Smalltown, Somewhere
3 posted 2009-02-23 03:24 AM


Revolving doors are the hardest to close.  I hope both of you find happiness.

~ Previously Known as Broken_Winged_Angel and BrokenWinged_Angel~

I know when to bow my head in defeat and move on...

eternity
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since 2009-05-19
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USA
4 posted 2009-05-19 11:10 PM


I like your poem! I had to read it twice to get some of the nuances. It definitely speaks to relationships I've experienced...


Joyce Johnson
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5 posted 2009-05-21 02:02 AM


I too had to go back and read it to understand that you are blaming yourself for something that is bringing the goodbye.  Hope to hear from you again.  Love, joyce
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