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N_i_C_o_L_E
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since 2008-05-01
Posts 11
North Carolina

0 posted 2008-05-06 10:58 AM


I’ve found it again another painful blow
The memory of your face
Like the ocean’s ebb and flow
If only the pain would cease for a moment
It seems as though by now I would be able to own it.

The clichés hide the fact that
On the inside I’m broken
All I could say has been said
All the words have been spoken
Yet still now, there’s so much unsaid
I can hardly bring myself to say it…
It’s over, your dead.

Sure I have so much in life that I can embrace
But still it’s so hard
to paint a smile on my face
You never were the kind to just hang around
I just never thought you’d leave, you’d be in the ground.

© Copyright 2008 Rachel Nicole - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
1 posted 2008-05-06 11:34 AM


DearestNicole~
First, let me welcome you to this friendly poetic circle of friends~

Next, the loss of a brother is a hurting loss ... having lost one of mine, I so understand this penning~

A poignant emote from your heart ... write it out, hon ... write it out~

*Huglets*
~*Marge~*~


~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -               noles1@totcon.com   

Trillium
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Member Patricius
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Idaho, USA
2 posted 2008-05-06 01:33 PM


The loss of a family member is a terrible blow and you don't adapt to it in a hurry. It's a long process learning to live with a hole in your heart! Eventually, you pick up the pieces and go on however and even learn there is still happiness in life!

Welcome to the site and hope you really enjoy it here. There are many fine poets and caring people here.

Betty Lou

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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2008-05-06 02:10 PM


A very sad, deep poem, Nicole. Please, allow us to extend our condolences, and our prayers that a healing comes from all of this to you and your family in time.

Welcome to Passions.

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Joyce Johnson
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Member Rara Avis
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912
Washington State
4 posted 2008-05-06 03:10 PM


Sooner or later we all go through this.  I am sorry it happened to you when you were still so young.  Joyce
2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228
Mississippi coast
5 posted 2008-05-07 06:58 AM


Coming to terms is hard to do. But PIP helps. It did for me when I lost my mother in 1999.
Write on,
Melton

midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
6 posted 2008-05-10 08:39 AM


Dear Nicole,

I am keeping you in prayer and do hope that you will get stronger everyday surely.

I lost my grandma in October last year, she literally brought me up and it was just really hard. Your poignant piece invokes powerful emotions in me: Not just of pain, but also of the touching memories I made with her.

Peace & Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

rmortimer1987
New Member
since 2008-05-05
Posts 7
Qld Australia
7 posted 2008-05-10 08:43 AM


not having lost a brother i cannot know the pain you are feeling but you have written it so beautifully and simply.
all i will say is that writing has helped me to vent and absorb what it is that is going on in my life.

Life will move forward and we all must keep up or be left behind.

Ruth

BrokenWinged_Angel
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since 2005-12-17
Posts 29

8 posted 2008-06-12 01:46 AM


I think we've all felt the pain of loosing someone close to us.  I have to say you've written about it very nicely.

BWA~

~Formerly known as Broken Winged Angel~

Life is like a coin.  You can spend it any way you wish, but you only spend it once.

K-K
Member
since 2008-03-13
Posts 153
Indiana
9 posted 2008-06-12 02:03 PM


The loss of anyone is so hard to bear, but it intensifies when they are taken away so young. I am so Sorry for your loss, and hope your expression in writing allows release. I too understand where you come from, he was 5 years old and left us due to the illness of cancer. I feel your pain and send love and blessings your way.
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