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r v wooo
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0 posted 2007-08-21 12:46 PM


                  The Witchen Kindow

It was long, long ago
when I ventured through the witchen kindow glass
and watched the giant flutterby
as he fluttered above the grass.
He quietly spoke to the flowers of spring
and then disappeared with the first drops rain.

I'll never forget the twinkle in his eyes
and the smile upon his face
when he returned the next morning
to that flowering garden place.
Oh, Mister Flutterby, we both have grown old.
I missed you this morning...where did you go?


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Beaone12
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1 posted 2007-08-22 10:09 PM


A nice switch of changing the letters of two familiar words to make them sound strange and new.
Instead of kitchen window, you used witchen kindow. Same with the word Butterfly which you made into flutterfly.

I think it was well done.

Bea-ing the Queen of my hive.

Joyce Johnson
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2 posted 2007-08-22 10:34 PM


Yes, I like the playful mood.  Joyce
r v wooo
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3 posted 2007-08-22 11:29 PM


the situation with the words actually goes much deeper. as a child i had a hearing and processing problem. still have the hearing problem...but i'm able to process better as a result of learning to read and trial and error experience. many of my flaws were not perceived by others. phonetically, the sounds were close enough to avoid detection. when i was 19 i became aware that i had a problem. until then i was not an avid reader. however, on this one particular day, i was reading and saw these two words together..."fly swatter"...and said to myself, "you ignorant fool". for years you have called that instrument a "flice water". i have learned to make associations and have cleaned up many of my faults, however, i'm still working on the reversal problem. thus, you have experienced some of my childish regression and my childish language.  

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Beaone12
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4 posted 2007-08-23 08:58 AM


Ther play of exchanging letters in words may originated from a problem in your past, but it is very intriguing in poetry.
Good job, either way.

Bea-ing the Queen of my hive.

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2007-08-23 11:17 AM


Loved this..unique and the regression was refreshing and brought a smile of rememberance to my face...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

r v wooo
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6 posted 2007-08-24 10:08 AM


ahhh, susan, bea and joyce you are all beautiful flutterbies. enjoyed your kind conversation and your interesting poetry.

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Beasley
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7 posted 2007-08-24 02:30 PM


I like the play on words. That's neat.
Barb

Vincent
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8 posted 2007-08-26 09:55 PM


well I think this is sweet, and bright. Vincent
r v wooo
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9 posted 2007-08-28 09:46 AM


thank you vincent...welcome to pub #3...hope you will share some of your writings with us. i have found pub #3 to be a safe haven in which write and share.
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10 posted 2007-08-28 06:29 PM


r v wooo,
The explanation is fascinating. It adds to the value of your write. And it is indeed a pleasure to read. Besides it's never too late for a good childhood!

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

r v wooo
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11 posted 2007-08-29 10:23 AM


yes, larry, explanations are sometimes like skeleton keys that open doors to understanding. the labyrinth within the human mind can be chaotic at times. it is the struggle with chaos that makes life worth living because it leads to understanding and truth!...the search for truth is a noble search!
Joyce Johnson
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12 posted 2007-08-29 11:17 AM


I found your explanation fascinating and I remembered an incident in my own childhood.  In our little country school we sang a song each morning.  I remember singing  "It isn't any trouble just to S.M.I.L.E." I hadn't seen the words written so I gustily and enthusiastically sang each morning,  "It isn't any trouble just essa my alee."
The words had no meaning whatever but that didn't faze me.  Love, Joyce  

r v wooo
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13 posted 2007-08-29 11:38 AM


thank you joyce, in more than just a single way. your early experience in the small country school has taken me back to my own early rote-memory learning experiences with songs and the phonetic expressions i made from what i "heard". i'm going to have to spend some time on the recall however. i find the learning process very interesting and i thank you again for sharing. in singing the national anthem, i heard the name "jose'" instead of the words "oh say"... "can you see"...and at church something we said, "thine is the power and the glory forever" and i heard it as, "dying is the power and the glory forever". often wonder how these and other like items have impacted upon my thinking process! thus, a probable explanation for my idiodynamic, psychological glitches.

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14 posted 2009-08-10 03:06 AM


The poem made me smile and the commentaries fascinated me.

Alison

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