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Vincent
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since 2007-02-03
Posts 52


0 posted 2007-02-21 08:26 AM



The hours of stillness
granted the world,
somewhere between
many cigarettes, coffee
and memories.

Waves lap the
shore with reliance,
distant lights, faint murmuring
of night once again.

If by chance you happen upon
this writing, a message in the
outlines, and stars,
where is a bottle when you need one"
search for me, on distant shores,
my" how I need you.

Just a message, a word or two,
sent to whom ever you are.
Just a thought,
someone is waiting that needs me too.

"Patience is everything,
time is a thief"
a quote from a lonely man.

I`ll leave my name
drawn here in the sand,
I think the child in us all.

Leave my heart,
for who might find it,
desperate to return it to me.

One more quote
from every heart in the world..

Please hurry"....Vincent

© Copyright 2006 Vincent

© Copyright 2007 Vincent - All Rights Reserved
Joyce Johnson
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Member Rara Avis
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912
Washington State
1 posted 2007-02-21 10:15 AM


A poignant plea, Vincent.  Very intriguing.  Joyce
midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
2 posted 2007-02-21 10:27 AM


Overwhelming emotions.. very intriguing read..

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

Debo
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since 2006-04-18
Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.
3 posted 2007-02-23 03:55 PM


A very intriging write indeed.

"Patience is everything,
time is a thief"

Oh my I love this part.

Debo

jody5
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since 2005-12-21
Posts 876
California, U.S.A.
4 posted 2007-02-23 05:16 PM


This poem stirred alot of emotions.  very nice.

Hugs Kimberly


jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2007-03-18 07:48 AM


"I`ll leave my name
drawn here in the sand,
I think the child in us all."

My favorite lines from all - I like the image (though sad and sort of wistful) it brings to my mine.

Just a nit...the last line is maybe lacking the word "is", and should read...the child is in us all. (hope that's what you meant.)

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