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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA 
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I play with paints watercolors and inks— today ingrained in my fingertips is green on the paper emerald whorls march a line of prints. . . fading into near horizon yesterday I hand-printed a blank canvas on the wall red—yellow—blue hands merge into green—orange—violet someday my ink-stained hands will escape to leap around— marking all -Beverly |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
an interesting piece..and...where does this need to touch & mark everyone come from? Well, you certainly have touched me...  Welcome back the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WordDancer~ I like your word palette~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
I enjoyed this one thoroughly. It took me back to my days in pre-school and kindergarten. finger paints were always fun. my favorite lines were. "someday my ink-stained hands will escape to leap around— marking all" very cool. only one suggestion, and this is just from a readers stand point. Perhaps you could use some stanza breaks. for example: I play with paints watercolors and inks— today ingrained in my fingertips is green on the paper emerald whorls march a line of prints. . . fading into near horizon yesterday I hand-printed a blank canvas on the wall red—yellow—blue hands merge into green—orange—violet someday my ink-stained hands will escape to leap around— marking all But, If you're not a fan of that then keep it the way it is. It's just easier, at least for me, to digest poems when they're in stanza's. -John nice use of muffin |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
peg...i'm very tactile marge, thanks for stopping by John...good idea...i'lll push and shove the words around and see what happens |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I liked this one alot -Juju |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
A facination with colour, i have that too and this poem drew me and didnt disappoint. Loved it. Well done Beverley Hugs June xxx |
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kaila Junior Member
since 2006-12-24
Posts 37PA |
Your screen name fits this poem as you dance from color to color and touch to touch. I have to agree with the suggestion to break into stanzas; I see some powerful images/words that seem missed in the flow of words. I definitely enjoyed your poem. |
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