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Words Under Glass

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Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN


0 posted 01-03-2009 07:44 PM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange


this is the newest song up on my myspace so feel free to check it out. you can just click on my homepage icon and it will come up.
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let me catch your words
so you can see them under glass
silhouetted in red
they look so lovely through the jar

so put them on a shelf
as constant reminder that your never alone
these words are under glass

all the colors of the world
are burning brightly from the bottle
the hues are eating through the canvas
these words are all i have


so put them on a shelf
as constant reminder that your never alone
these words are under glass
© Copyright 2009 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.


1 posted 01-04-2009 07:59 PM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for viking_metal

The first stanza was perfect, and If I were you, I'd let that one stanza stand alone.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


2 posted 01-06-2009 09:27 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

A very clear message. I've missed reading yours and other's poems.
Nice one.

There is power in the pen.

young_blood
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since 09-19-2003
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Indianapolis, IN


3 posted 01-07-2009 08:39 AM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

I really like the idea that you had here. I think that the whole "words under glass" thing is cool. Kinda like trophy words. I would like to hear the song as the flow of this is hard to pick up without the music.
Clockwork_Orange
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4 posted 01-08-2009 06:56 AM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange

then just visit  www.myspace.com/josalintower
Clockwork_Orange
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5 posted 01-08-2009 06:56 AM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange

ty for listening.
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6 posted 01-08-2009 07:26 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Wow! I'm listening to your music on myspace right now and your amazing at guitar and writing! Great work dude!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

 
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