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If I Bought You An Ocean (MASTERED! )

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Clockwork_Orange
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standing in the shadows
in the distance up ahead
lost inside the memories
and every word that you said

what is it with you
why must you tear me down
why have you sunk so low
and chose not to make a sound

now if i bought you an ocean
you would let me drown in the tide
maybe it will turn crimson
with all the hate i have inside

and it hurts so bad
to see the end
with these bitter words
spelled out in the sand

with a look of distaste
caught up in your eyes
i fail to see the beauty
in this fading twilight

so lets keep this quiet
keep it deep in silence
swallow these words
and stop this violence

and if i bought you an ocean
i would drown in the tides
maybe it will turn crimson
with all the hate i hate inside
© Copyright 2008 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
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1 posted 12-31-2008 07:21 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Love This, It's Totally Amazing!!... Nothing You Do Doesn't Blow Me Away!!
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2 posted 01-02-2009 12:01 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"if i bought you an ocean
i would drown in the tides
maybe it will turn crimson
with all the hate i hate inside"

I really did love this poem. Great stanza up above.

-Zach

So together but so broken inside

rebelangelv
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since 05-28-2007
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3 posted 01-02-2009 06:24 PM       View Profile for rebelangelv   Email rebelangelv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rebelangelv

wow...this was really good. you really captured the feeling and i connected. great write!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

 
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