I've enjoyed reading the poem, it evocatively brings to mind memories that most of us have. But I do think your verse would be enhanced with the use of regular meter and solid rhymes. I believe that what you wrote deserves a more structured form. Here's a quick example with your first stanza:
My tears do not fall fast enough
Once in my room alone at night;
I walk to music and I want
To run away from words that bite.
Granted, some words are missing. But the rhymes are solid and the meter is tight. It would be for you to decide what to keep and what to discard, or simply reorganize. I ventured this as I believe you have got strong potential. You're free to take it or leave it. Should you have any question, I'd be happy to help
A merry Christmas to you Mark