Freeand2sexy, I enjoy reading your poems. I believe you've got great poetic potential, and I look forward to reading more. Have you thought about giving the other forms (e.g. sonnets, ballads) a try?
Also, with a little work, you could tighten the meter, find solid rhymes and enhance your poem greatly. For example:
In the fourth line of the first stanza, a solid rhyme can be achieved by changing "this whole time" to "at all times;"
In the fourth stanza:
"And now I know
I can be free"
I'll let you work the rest, if it pleases you. Should you need help, it is available.
I look forward to reading your next post