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Summer Sneaking.

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xCharliexChucklezx
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0 posted 12-14-2008 03:27 AM       View Profile for xCharliexChucklezx   Email xCharliexChucklezx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for xCharliexChucklezx

The night was high,
The breeze chilled,
When i saw your face,
I was thrilled.

"Grab your coat",
You said to me,
As we snuck out my window,
Silently.

As i made the leap,
My foot got caught,
Mother would never,
Let this lesson go uncaught.

We ran and we ran,
As fast as we could,
until the coast was clear,
Here we stood.

I remember that summer,
Very well indeed,
It was the summer,
Of simplicity.

As we sat on the beach,
Looking at the stars,
I vividly remember,
You touching my scars.

I gasped and pulled away,
You held on tighter,
"It happened long ago"
I felt so much lighter.

The walk home was easy,
I knew I'd already been caught,
I never got over,
The lesson you taught.

You don't understand,
The impact you had,
That night at the beach,
You're still a striking lad.

But now things have changed,
We've both moved on,
Life pushed us away,
But didn't lead us wrong.
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Marc-Andre
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1 posted 12-14-2008 09:41 AM       View Profile for Marc-Andre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marc-Andre

Charlie, try to use blue or better still, black fonts. This is really killing my eyes. Nice poem, though Mark
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2 posted 12-14-2008 02:21 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

Wow, this is A really good story I love it! I've been there before.. and you always move on this really brings me back to those times.. thanks for sharing
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3 posted 12-15-2008 07:16 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Nice poem!!!

I love pancakes!!!

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4 posted 12-15-2008 07:19 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Hmm I could of sworn that I already commented on this poem.. Anyway.. This is a really good poem. And yeah blue or black helps your readers to read your work.. lol. its just a thought. Great writing, Keep it up.

-Zach

So together but so broken inside

KandyGrl511
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5 posted 12-26-2008 08:08 PM       View Profile for KandyGrl511   Email KandyGrl511   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for KandyGrl511

i really liked it
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6 posted 12-26-2008 08:48 PM       View Profile for HopelessPoet   Email HopelessPoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HopelessPoet

That was a passionate poem, I really enjoyed reading it.
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