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Let Gandhi have his Peace

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Earl Robertson
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0 posted 12-12-2008 10:43 PM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Earl Robertson

Let Gandhi have his Peace

The lion roars
Itís a kittens meow
Tell half the story
Vengeance to avow

Let Judas have his silver
And Gandhi have his peace
Donít have a thing to loose
Except my friends increase

The kitten roars
But the sun shines down
Can half a smile
Reverse half a frown?

How could it be worthless
To let the swords rust
To soften the hearts
Turn the stone into dust?

Itís a twisted question
But itís a twisted game
I wonít touch your dice
I wonít call upon your name

Let Judas have his silver
And Gandhi have his peace
The immortal then can bleed
Peaceful illusions cease

My melancholy is purely my own

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 12-13-2008 12:16 PM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

I really like this- I thought the ideas were really good.
I loved
The kitten roars
But the sun shines down
Can half a smile
Reverse half a frown?

and the stanza right after it. Some of the rhyming came off off because it was inverse rhyme. Maybe try and see if you can reread it so it will read smoother but other than that it was really good. I liked it.
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2 posted 12-13-2008 08:40 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"How could it be worthless
To let the swords rust
To soften the hearts
Turn the stone into dust?

Itís a twisted question
But itís a twisted game
I wonít touch your dice
I wonít call upon your name"

Something about those two stanza's just made me fall in love with this poem. I really like your thoughts in it. But I'd have to admit at the beginning i was sorta confused about it. Like I didn't know what it was suppose to be about. Great poem over all though.

-Zach

So together but so broken inside

Earl Robertson
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3 posted 12-14-2008 11:24 PM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

Thanks guys!
Rhia: I've read over it a few times and can't find the flow problem, could you be more specific so my advantage doesn't continue to blind me?
Rain: Muahahahahahahahaha you will never know what this is about!!!

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What?

My melancholy is purely my own

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