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Bags' Groove (Take 2)

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young_blood
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0 posted 12-07-2008 08:16 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for young_blood

My right leg still jitters a bit,
I wish it would stop that.
More of a twitch than habit
that I can't catch.
Fingers locked,
reason blocked,
I hope my eyes stay closed.

My right eye still sees some color
I wish it would enhance it.
My foot continues to tap the floor
as my cigarette stays lit.
Fingers locked,
smile cocked,
I hope I stay secluded.

My right hand slips to my ear
to rock my head slowly,
Chaos makes sense when so near
but makes me feel lonely.
Smile cocked,
ipod docked,
Bags' Groove (Take 2).
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RevengeIsMine
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1 posted 12-08-2008 06:48 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Can't belive there's been no comments... Brilliant as per usual!!!
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Wow, Great poem!!!

I love pancakes!!!

young_blood
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3 posted 12-08-2008 11:05 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

I'm glad you guys enjoyed it. I really really struggled with this. The main reason was that I was actually trying to write about a subject. I was forcing words out. Blah. Anyway, thanks.
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4 posted 12-09-2008 12:38 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

I always enjoy your poems.. the images blow me away
Krysti
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5 posted 12-16-2008 02:10 PM       View Profile for Taylor See   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Taylor See

Love your poems. The balance of imagery, and that left to the imagination, is wonderful. I love the flow of the poem too =)

Great work

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

young_blood
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6 posted 01-07-2009 08:37 AM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

I'm waiting for the day when you guys don't like something I write. Haha. Thank you all for the encouragement.
 
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