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Beautifully Broken (GOD I HATE YOU RIGHT NOW)

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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 11-27-2008 06:39 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine


This is my way of venting... My fiance or whatever he likes too call himselves these days is stressing me atm. The baby is due in a few months n i'm totally torn... Anyhow on the mark of our 1 year anniversy of us being together his ex gf (of 2 years) lands on our doorstep in the pouring rain sooking cause she has nothing.. so of ALL things he could do HE OFFERS HER A PLACE TOO STAY! She has made things quite clear too me and my mum she wants him back and has walked in on him several times in the shower etc.. so maybe i'm jealous but i've tried teling him how i feel and he doesn't listen.. it's like he doesn't know me anymore..

Oh n since like nobody replies on my poems these days (Luv u Keagan n Zach) i decided to start adding images too my poems... don't know if this one fits.. but thanks too my gorgeous cousin for posing in this picture..
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Beautifully Broken

J

Tell me why youíre not listening
To a single word Iíve said
Why the hell did you leave me here alone
Whilst you carried her too bed

Then tell me why the tears I cry
Fall down my cheeks each night
Then tell me why my broken heart
Is still bleeding out in fright

So why am I not good enough?
God tell me what Iíve done
Did I breakdown too long ago
Did we stop having all the fun!

Is it because Iím pregnant
Or is it because weíre through
Either way Iím tired now
Iím sick of crying over you

So now tell me why Iím so messed up
And why you only stop too say hello
Then tell me why i fell apart last week
And why you didnít even know

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The pictures line the hallway
Memories of what we used to be
I left the engagement ring on the counter
Is this it for you and me?

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Falling rain
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1 posted 11-27-2008 09:34 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Honey I feel sooo bad for you and If i had enough money I'd buy a plane ticket to come give you a huge hug and kick your fiance's butt.. lol This poem was beautifully written like usual. And oh hone.. I feel so bad... Hope thing get better!! -HUG!-

-Zach  

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland


2 posted 11-27-2008 08:49 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Do you know what im doing right now? I am giving you the biggest hug i possibly can without hurting you or ur baby lol. I don't know what i would do if i were you but be strong and keep trying. luv ya hun.

{~~*~~}

Miss.Emmalee

"Who the **** are you?!!?.. GET AWAY FROM MY LIMO!!"

rhia_5779
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California


3 posted 11-28-2008 01:31 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

Wow this is amazing and really full of emotion! Powerful write!
ruskins
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4 posted 11-28-2008 07:29 AM       View Profile for ruskins   Email ruskins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ruskins

how did your fiance react when slut-bag walked in on him in the shower? If he didn't freak out and tell her to get out... leave him, cause he's going to cause you a lot of pain.
hope you get through this without to much grief. loved the poem btw.
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5 posted 11-28-2008 11:29 AM       View Profile for Ringo   Email Ringo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ringo

I normally don't enjoy rhyming poetry, yet this one caught my attention, and after a couple of more reads, I decided that I might possibly be wrong.
A typical good job by one of our more talented teens.

What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?.
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hunnie_girl
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6 posted 11-28-2008 01:46 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

Jess you are way to amazing and talented to be treated like that... i hope you follow your head and your heart and find the right path to take.
love always
Krysti
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7 posted 11-29-2008 09:34 PM       View Profile for I am the arch angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for I am the arch angel

i can relate with you, when the ex's come to haunt you.....it sucks.... just thump him on the head a couple of times   and zach, you won't kick nobodys butt........hell i can take you..you'll just give her a hug......  and jess, i do to reply to them....  beautifully written... keep doing what you do best,    much love

keagan
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8 posted 11-29-2008 11:03 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Ehh true enough Keagan.. And if it weren't you being like a freakin huge and me being a pacifist then I wouldn't kick his butt. But any who.. Great poem Jess. Hope things get better.

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

angelfacegurl
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9 posted 12-18-2008 11:05 AM       View Profile for angelfacegurl   Email angelfacegurl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelfacegurl

im so sorry but this poem is perfect!

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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10 posted 12-19-2008 05:42 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

aww...this is so sad. i really hope things have gotten better. you have a beautiful baby and i'm praying things will be all together, awesome, in the long run.
great write and fitted together so amazingly well!!

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

 
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