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undead warhead
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0 posted 2008-11-22 05:09 PM



Can't your booze liquefied mind solve the tragedy filled
chaos (Satan) that rages inside you?
You circle around the solution, hoping it ends up in your trajectory
(tear in your eye).
You can't comprehend anything but the reasons, why your things are
so messed up, because deep inside you know the wrong is the right
(you are f*cked up).
You are not being lead by an benevolent inner voice, but a blocker that closes your path from where you belong.

To the lost is your journey that ends up in the death of your physical body
(self pitier).
You know the things in your heart, to which you have built your life,
being decent and taking responsibility.

You let it all eat s**t, and you furiously run towards the cliff,
that is the last orgasm of your hate.
Your every sentence is one millionth of how you say it.
Your every idea is one billionth of how you smell of.
Your every expression is one trillionth of how you look.
That which what you appear to others,
is an infinite part of what you are being seen as,
because you are everything, all else is secondary.

Do not forgive mistakes of others, because then you can't
resort on your own superiority when in need.
You fake the caring about others so others will take care of you.
You are faithfull so you will not be cheated on, and when you are,
you don't understand you are s**t (you are s**t), but you blame others
so that your self defence mechanism will keep you alive.
False feel of pleasures will sometimes fill your body, so that biological
continuum is made possible.
You are not the one who thinks. You are the one who feels.
Your body is a pawn that has been programmed to live the same unoriginal
pattern like the one inside in fungi and mold.

Your understanding of most subjects is less than one per mil.
You are making strong opinions about everything but their meaning is zero
(idiot). The only advantage you get from defending your case is the endorphine secreting from your victory, that empties your empty head
and makes your penis erect.

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Falling rain
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1 posted 2008-11-25 08:31 AM


Wow... Powerful write you got there! Keep up the writing and Welcome to Pip!

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2008-11-25 04:47 PM


i cant honestly say i follow. i liked a lot of it but it might flow better with more stanzas and maybe a little shorter lines. just a thought tho
undead warhead
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since 2008-11-22
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3 posted 2008-12-04 11:04 AM


You are propably right, it could have some tweaks here and there
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