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shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 247
inside the shadows

0 posted 2008-11-16 07:16 PM


beware of the roses
that have wilted from distress.
bleeding from their petals,
they’ve forgotten how to breathe.
beauty was all they understood
until the sky turned a darker black.
the tables have turned
and the raindrops have switched their forms.
thunder cracking, lightening flashing,
the clouds are swirling ‘round.
hollow eyes on bloody faces,
dripping through the ash.
demonic laughter, traveling through the air
while graying wings fall from the sky.
the roses have admitted defeat
as the evil takes over their souls.
wilting back towards the earth,
the evil has stolen their breath.

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
1 posted 2008-11-16 07:45 PM


This is good tori..
as usual...

your a great writer... remember that...

Love forever,
Jess

P.S title could be Poisioned Thorns idk.. but it's upto u

Pantheress
Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215
Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2008-11-16 08:22 PM


So intense.. So well written,
Evil screams its claim?
Thanks for sharing,smiles..

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