Tears Of Acid Rain (Fading, Running, Leaving..)

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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-10-30 08:35 PM

Allo Guys... Last Writers Class Assignment... Jess We were told to find something that we could draw enough emotion on.. so i dunno what this is like.. handed it in last night won't get my grade for a bit. So here it is... Oh n the words were Fading, Running, Leaving..

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Her footsteps down the hallway
As she cried out in pain
She put her head against the wall
And cried tears of acid rain

She screams but nobody hears her
She cries but tears don’t fall
She’d die but nobody would notice
She’s the girl who’s six feet tall

Her eyes are red from crying
She’d breath but it hurts too much
She’d fall but it doesn’t hurt her
She’s the girl who lost her touch

She’d smile but she’d be faking
She’d laugh but it’d be a lie
She’d pretend but nobody would believe her
She’s the girl who wants to die

She’s Fading Now!!

I’m tired and it’s cold outside
And these perceptions you have of me
Their jaded around the edges
And far too smudged to see

I’m sorry I’m not good enough
And I’m sorry that I’ve done wrong
I guess that’s all there’s left to say
This goodbye won’t be too long

My bags r packed by the front door
I’m sorry but I’m leaving now
It’s time I started moving on
It’s time I remembered how

She trembled for a little while
Scared for what you’d do
But then u looked her in the eyes
And she fell out of love with u

She’s Running Now...

She picked up her bag
And before u knew she ran
She ran right down the driveway
And stumbled in the van

You didn’t see what you were doing
But you drove her away
And all those times she cried at night
Had led up to today

She’s Leaving Now...

You could hear the memories falling
From the pictures on the wall
The ones of you and her it seems
Lined up the entire wall

You didn’t see all the signs
But when she left you knew
You pushed her away she said
And deep down you knew it too

But splashed against the hallway wall
Were the tears she cried in pain?
Little holes formed in the paint job
For that girl cried acid rain

I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

1 posted 2008-10-30 08:43 PM

wow!....this is amazing! like you. you used "u" instead of you once but that was just me being observant haha good job!

STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
Junior Member

since 2007-02-07

Posts 16

2 posted 2008-11-20 12:22 PM

iENJOYyED THiS POEM .
OMG ! THiS WAS AN AMAZiN` WRiTE .
GOOD JOB HUN .
LOVED iT !

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

3 posted 2008-11-20 11:14 AM

Amazing. that's the only thing i can possibly imagine to say. You wrote this so fantasticly. Love it.

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