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Falling rain
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0 posted 10-22-2008 05:04 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"Okay this poem is SUPER long.. Really long for me. But I just kept rhyming and rhyming.. I think its a little too much.. But I think you guys get my point in this super long,bad poem.. It was written about one of my friends. They know who they are so I'm not gunna point her out. But I hope she get's my messege in this.. Thanks for reading... If you did.."

-Zach

Her tear soaked eyes
Are flooding the room.
Little does the world know
Her soul is to leave soon..

See the misfit in the mirror.
See the one with the broken heart.
She's the one we all know and love
But she's abused and torn apart..

Her past is written in bloody scars
Running down both her arms.
Put down the weapon.
Please disarm.

We don't want to go there
Please, I'm here.
I want to help you.
Please don't fear.

The past is long gone.
We can't change that.
Your easing up
But here you sat.

I couldn't help.
She went too far.
Her name is to remember.
Now to start her memoir.

She had a beauty.
No other had.
Inner beauty shines the brightest.
But her soul was breaking;her smile sad.

This girl's body is living.
But her soul's long gone.
That leaves me here
to sing this song.

Please learn a lesson
Learn it well.
Or pray to find
Your way in hell

Because no light is shining
in her eyes
While the leafs left changing
Her soul continues to die.

Now im here in my room
Crying out the pain inside
Because I can't wear this mask
This pain I can't just hide.

I miss her spirit
Her beautiful heart
But her's is dead now. Not a spark
of happiness lie in her heart.

What could I've done
to change her past
To let her live longer
Make it last.

But theres no hope
That I can see
My eyes blind
How can this be?

    



© Copyright 2008 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
BeyaK
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1 posted 10-23-2008 04:23 AM       View Profile for BeyaK   Email BeyaK   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BeyaK

pretty long indeed but love reading it, great one :-)

~~*K. B.*~~

Dark Star
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2 posted 10-28-2008 06:32 PM       View Profile for Dark Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Star

=)
XxForever.BrokenxX
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3 posted 10-30-2008 08:23 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Wow zach, that's equal to like...4 of ur poems! lol im just kidding. Great write, I love it.  

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans....#}
{~Emily~}

Falling rain
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4 posted 11-05-2008 01:04 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

lol. No kidding! i was like "Phew!" right after I got finished. lol. Thanks for reading guys!

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

KandyGrl511
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5 posted 12-02-2008 07:04 PM       View Profile for KandyGrl511   Email KandyGrl511   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for KandyGrl511

that was soooooo great of a poem!?!i so much loved it!?!
TrueDesire12
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6 posted 12-09-2008 03:56 PM       View Profile for TrueDesire12   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TrueDesire12

What a great poem, loved reading it!

TrueDesire
xx
Rand0m_guy54321
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7 posted 12-09-2008 07:35 PM       View Profile for Rand0m_guy54321   Email Rand0m_guy54321   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rand0m_guy54321

Wow that was very long but worth it! awesome poem
what_hope?
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8 posted 12-13-2008 08:24 PM       View Profile for what_hope?   Email what_hope?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for what_hope?

i like this poem onsepter 10 2008 ashlen alen killed her self and some of us are still in the dark praying 4 light

Falling rain
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9 posted 12-13-2008 08:47 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Oh I'm sorry for your loss. I hope you and the others mourning her death are doing okay..
Thanks for reading my poem guys!

-Zach

So together but so broken inside

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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10 posted 12-15-2008 09:07 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

wow zach. this was absolutly stunning. i didn't even notice the length because it was so amazing.
really great job on this one...its one of my favorites!!!
library..

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

 
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