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Teen Poetry #8

Clarity Shines Through

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-10-15 10:51 PM

here i am
lost inside my head
where minutes dont exist
and nothings ever said
but with silence never broken
clarity shines through
an epiphany of broken dreams
are drowned out with the thought of you

so step back as it all goes black
and let it lull you off to sleep
choke it out as it comes around
then stop and try to breath

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

1 posted 2008-10-16 01:12 PM

Wow. Good stuff. Liked the last stanza especially. Alarming. But in a good way. Makes you stop and think.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-10-16 04:29 PM

I like the first stanza. I understood it more then your second one.. but maybe I'll have to re-read your poem again.. Its a good poem.. not my favorite tho.

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

3 posted 2008-10-16 06:30 PM

Wow, good poem!!!

"Life is too confusing, but I like it that way!"

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

4 posted 2008-10-18 12:05 PM

i really liked this one, it was short but to the point and i agree with octave, it makes you stop and think.

good work

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