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Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
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BC, Canada

0 posted 2008-10-11 02:45 PM


So this is the Victory
A peace fills the air
I never knew your glory
But I’m glad you’re finally there

Oh now my help-meet
What have we done?
Made now the victory
Never thought to run

Is that how it’s meant to be?
With a song in air
End the world’s strife my friend
Patch up every tear

How is it then my saviour
Who brought me to my Lord
Could I forget in music
In their harmonic chord?

Come to me in moments
Of heart-ache and despair
As you saved my so shall I
Give what I can through care

But also in those moments
When joy is all we know
When even a lament
Cannot sorrow show

Come to me when music
Abounds within the soul
That this may be the victory
Triumph of every goal

For this is not full vic’try
When sorrow doth unite
And joy is much to happy
When I don’t have to fight

I do not feel justified
In the things I say today
Oh happy day, but in my heart
I’ll say them anyway

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

© Copyright 2008 Frank Robertson - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
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1 posted 2008-10-11 07:58 PM


This is great... You Say I'm Talented.. You've Got More Talent Than Me MR!! lol.

Well done..'

Huggles n Aussie love to u!!

Falling rain
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2 posted 2008-10-11 08:14 PM


Oh yes plenty of talent there! lol Envy is starting to run through my vains cause of you mister! lol. Great poem Sir!

-Zach  

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
3 posted 2008-10-11 11:43 PM



Oh come on Jess you know that's not true! You both of you write better poems than these on a daily basis!
But thank you both anyways, nice to know my works appreciated.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

Taylor See
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since 2008-10-07
Posts 55
North Carolina, US
4 posted 2008-10-13 03:13 PM


You underestimate yourself, this was fantastic.

Very deep and it takes some thought to get your head around. Give yourself credit, it was a great write.

And write some more!

Taylor

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