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young_blood
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0 posted 2008-10-06 09:24 PM


I've been watching you cut
holes in the sky with your nail,
poking your fingers through to capture god,
but it seems a bit circular doesn't it?

To hold god in your palm is to master
yourself.

© Copyright 2008 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-10-06 09:47 PM


wow this is very in-depth... I mean way to much for me to understand. lol.. Great poem though!

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 2008-10-07 02:13 AM


OMG your back.. And about bloody time too i say!... Took you long enough!.. He he..

I love your work so much it scares me.. It Really Really does....

The thing i really love about ur work is the story u find between the lines of all your stuff.. It really is inspirational!... Well Done!!

Earl Robertson
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3 posted 2008-10-07 10:11 AM


Alex! Where have you been man? Nice to have you back.
Exelent poem by the way. I'm too tired to deciefer it right now...but I'll take a go at it later.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

young_blood
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4 posted 2008-10-07 07:41 PM


Thank you all. it has been sometime since I've even written something let alone posted. Thanks for your feedback.
Taylor See
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5 posted 2008-10-13 03:30 PM


Again, very deep and thought-provoking. I enjoyed this one very much.
Quite a lot of talent you have!

Will be looking for more,

Taylor

Earl Robertson
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6 posted 2008-10-13 04:40 PM


Now I feel stupid. Reading this the second time it's pretty obvious what you mean.

People who keep looking for God through external sources are bound for failure? You can control God by controlling yourself?
Interesting idea...not that I agree, but I can see a bit inherit (if incomplete) truth.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

young_blood
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7 posted 2008-10-14 07:36 PM


Earl, that's kinda close. More of my point was that (in my view) one cannot know the complete nature of God (any god for that matter) without first controlling yourself.
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