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Clockwork_Orange
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0 posted 2008-10-05 03:37 PM



is it normal to feel alone
in a crowd of your friends
conversations all around
but the silence comes again

im in the middle of it all
yet im so far away
because i know that im different
and thats all i have to say

and no one really knows me
they just see me as i am
but they dont know whats in my head
its a forbidden lonely land

i stand alone
in this bottomless cold
that has become me

and this empty road
has become my home
its all i have left


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1 posted 2008-10-05 03:39 PM


"im in the middle of it all
yet im so far away
because i know that im different
and thats all i have to say"

I absolutely loved this part. Exceedingly well written as always. I relate.

Cierra

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2 posted 2008-10-05 06:29 PM


"and no one really knows me
they just see me as i am
but they dont know whats in my head
its a forbidden lonely land"

I know how you feel man.. Great work

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
Posts 422
Canada
3 posted 2008-10-05 08:32 PM


this was an amazing poem. alot of it is like i just read my life on the screen. it was incredible...great write! library.

~*Julianna*~

"Somewhere under the rainbow...there will be thunderstorms."

freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12
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CA, USA
4 posted 2008-10-05 11:33 PM


Amazing! I so can relate!

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
5 posted 2008-10-06 02:21 PM


I am so sorry. I know what you mean, and I think it's the worst feeling in the world.

Best of luck giving yourself meaning. If you ever want to talk, I welcome a measage from your poetic genius anytime.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

Taylor See
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since 2008-10-07
Posts 55
North Carolina, US
6 posted 2008-10-07 02:38 PM


I really enjoyed this part:

"and no one really knows me
they just see me as i am
but they dont know whats in my head
its a forbidden lonely land"

Thoroughly well written. Very nice job!

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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7 posted 2008-10-08 09:26 PM


Bryan, that was amazing! I loved it, so relateable, for me at least. Love it.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

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