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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
This might be a slightly confusing poem to understand but I hope you enjoy it anyways You can't see Too blind to believe Look at your mind Empty, all the time Randomly, you lips rhyme Astoundingly, your what I find Ears that hear no cries A nose that smells no lies Breath without sighs Movements that want to fight A heart not knowing what's right Cuz you can't see Just a lost destiny Forgotten, eventually Fallen eyes, unrealized Still blind, I'm not surprised Wasted, all the time Sadly, unkind But this time, your not mine Someone else's to find While your still blind Live in the present but don't forget the future |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Its not hard to understand got to re-read it to get the meaning straight.. but some of it didn't quite fit.. although I really liked your choice of words in this stanza.. "Cuz you can't see Just a lost destiny Forgotten, eventually Fallen eyes, unrealized Still blind, I'm not surprised" Very Good wording there... But none-the-less this poem is good. I like it!  -Zach "I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!" |
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