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HersheyKiss
Member

since 2008-06-02

Posts 137
New Jersey

0 posted 2008-09-29 07:23 PM

Hey, sorry it's been so long. Things are soooooo bad and I just try to stay out of the house as long as possible. This is the most recent poem that I wrote. Let me know what you think.

Restless:

Tormentor of my dreams,
Monster from my past,
Release me from your cage,
Grant me peace at last.

Let loose your hold on me,
Remove yourself from my mind,
Have mercy on this soul,
Give me strength to leave you behind.

Take pity on your victim,
Plague my dreams no more,
Allow me to escape you,
And be the girl I was before.

Permit me to stand tall,
Return to me my smile,
Take back the fear and hurt,
And let me rest a while.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2008-09-29 07:32 PM

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! its soooooo great and wonderful

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

2 posted 2008-09-30 07:11 AM

really enjoyed reading this, was soo good.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2008-09-30 06:55 PM

I agree! I enjoyed this alot! you have an amazing talent with words! Great job!

-Zach

"Only in darkness can we see the stars.
And only there is it darkest before the dawn."

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

4 posted 2008-09-30 07:24 PM

You do have a talent with words.
I feel realy stupid, wishing I could help and knowing I can't...realy hate that.
Best of Luck

FRANK! You CANNOT speak to yourself that way! It's disrespectful and rude.

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

5 posted 2008-10-01 03:03 PM

Good stuff. Zach's right, you have a way with words. Stay strong.

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

6 posted 2008-10-07 02:42 PM

Amazing poem, it very nice flow to it.

My favorite lines are:

Permit me to stand tall,
Return to me my smile,
Take back the fear and hurt,
And let me rest a while.

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

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