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ShawtySheFly
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since 2007-12-19
Posts 71
In his Elevator (LOL)

0 posted 2008-09-26 11:42 AM



what do i call you
cuz you make me cry
heartbreaker, heart taker, that needle in my eye
the knife in my heart cuz you stabbed me there
the blood in my vains, you stopped the flow
my body is trembling and i'm freezing cold

you are cold, your heart is cold
i hate you, hate
you eye-pleaser, mind teaser, that kissing disiese
so you think you're a pimp ...shiit boy please
what do i call you
who do you think you are
cuz you make me cry
i just wish you would die
but i would probably continue to cry

Angel.Baby>>>Nae<<<

© Copyright 2008 Angel - All Rights Reserved
freeand2sexy
Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704
CA, USA
1 posted 2008-09-26 08:52 PM


Wow, i really liked it and it flowed nicely!

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Earl Robertson
Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
2 posted 2008-09-26 09:44 PM



Good luck. If you need to talk...


As for the poem I thought the flow could have been better but that's probably just me.

Don't believe Everything you Think

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