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Teen Poetry #8

not to sure

yvetters_24
Member

since 2006-08-27

Posts 52
california

0 posted 2008-09-25 11:10 PM

so this is still not done but i thought i would get some feed back from some good writers

I say f*ck you in my head as I stand here speechless teeth clenched muscles tense holding my breath waiting for you to give it a rest
I'll and walk away with out even saying a word
And its not becuz I'm afraid of you
But I just dont know what I'll do
All this anger has beeb building up inside
I supress the erg
And walk away watching my hands tremble and shake
But I don't know how much more of this I can take
I know this anger is starting to seep out
And u dont know what im mad about
And I'm not going to take the time to explain
I can feel the blood boiling in my vains
Like my vains I'm about to explode
I got the gun now lock and load
Dare I use if for you or me
It is not me but all the anger
Just remember u are the one who pushed me
So Dont morn over my lifeless body
When I say goodbye to this world

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2008-09-26 08:49 PM

Wow it sounds really sad but i've been there too. You wrote it in a way that allowed me to feel the emotion, it was really good.

Live in the present but don't forget the future

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