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Octave
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since 2008-07-29
Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

0 posted 2008-09-11 03:41 PM



Let’s Pretend

I walk this trodden path
A never ending journey
All that watches over me
The sun that sits there burning

The trees stand in tall salute
Lining my way to destination
The grass bows beneath my feet
In respectful notification

The only words that utter near
Are trapped inside my skull
The clear sky overhead,
Sings in monotone dull

I feel no fear trapped inside
Ribcage that captures beating heart
Looking back behind me
I see no end nor start

Silence screams inside my eyes
Colours drip from peeling lips
I feel sounds through broken fingers
I walk in starts and trips

The things around me make sense
Painting overalls, loaves of bread
Arms stiffened by my sides
Stop me clawing in my head

The birds speak to me, speak to me
They whistle in my ears
The scratch at shattered thoughts
They peck at fat, red tears

Simple stuff pass me by
White paint, black suits, string
It soothes me to a quiet peace
It dulls that aching ring

In my simple world alone
It’s just m and just myself
No one tries to speak to me
No one calls me filth

Just me, the birds, the sun
No storms, no colour, no pain
In my simple little world
I can pretend I’m sane

Thanks for taking the time to read. =]

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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
1 posted 2008-09-11 06:25 PM


Just me, the birds, the sun
No storms, no colour, no pain
In my simple little world
I can pretend I’m sane

gotta love the ending most. its strait up gorgeous.

Octave
Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.
2 posted 2008-09-16 11:39 AM


Thank you very much.I feel that the poem was wirtten with with mental health problems in mind, but i can relate to it myself, an alarming amount. Thanks for the comment. =D
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