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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-09-10 07:56 PM


nothing seems to come from me
as i put this pen to use
i cant put down what i feel
im lost and confused

and if your
reading this
im already gone
theres no replies
to my goodbyes
so ill just say so long

im looking at the stars
and hoping you are too
because every time i close my eyes
theres a memory of you
and maybe you could save
maybe its not too late
for these words of cold regret
to decide this fate

and if your
reading this
im already gone
theres no replies
to my goodbyes
so ill just say so long

© Copyright 2008 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
1 posted 2008-09-11 01:05 AM


Okay so i've been crying pretty much all day, stupid hormones and atm i am sobbing my pretty little heart out and i can't stop... You are the worlds greatest poet.. and i love your work more than i could ever describe..
Falling rain
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2 posted 2008-09-11 08:25 AM


I definitely agree with Jess here... its simple magical how you write... Its like you cast a spell on me to read on.. haha.. Great write..

(Library)

-Zach

P.S. I'm deeply honored that you wrote a guitar piece to match my poem.. Thank you very much..

SEA
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with you
3 posted 2008-09-11 09:02 AM


"im looking at the stars
and hoping you are too
because every time i close my eyes
theres a memory of you"

I can't even begin to tell you how much I LOVE this part right here...so completely perfect

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
4 posted 2008-09-11 06:22 PM


wow you guys thank you so much.
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