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The Puppet Master |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
i wrote it in all of 3 minutes and its also one of my first attempts at freeverse so if it stinks please tell me. thanx. ___________________________________ I am the puppet but where is my master? i sit abandonned, alone crying i can scarcely breath- a puppet, lying lifeless on the floor waiting for those powerful fingers to make me dance, and live, and laugh once more but now, i am nothing paint-chipped wood and lopsided smile i wait i wonder i can feel myself slowly disintegrating into the surrounding earth once loved, now a fading memory lying lifeless on the floor a loved one, deserted [This message has been edited by Jaki H (08-25-2008 11:35 AM).] |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
i hate freeverse poetry. hate it. but you pull it off quite well. loved reading this one. keep posting, love to read more. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
hey Hun, I'm with C.O On this one i absouletly hate free-verse with a passion.. So i've no thoughts at all.. nice too see u bak on the pages... |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
haha thats ok. to be honest i pretty much hate free verse as well but i just figured i'd give it a try. dont worry though im sticking to my usual stuff cause no offense but it dosent take much effort or time to write something like that. i took me like 3 minutes [This message has been edited by Jaki H (08-25-2008 11:50 PM).] |
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