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Teen Poetry #8

Have You Ever???

Love_Skull
Junior Member

since 2008-07-15

Posts 44

0 posted 2008-07-15 11:34 PM

Have you ever cried without tears,
I have during these long endless years.
Have you ever touched but not felt,
I have while watching my feelings melt. Have you ever tried to speak but nothing came out,
I have while trying to scream and shout.
Have you ever put a smile on you’re face while dreary,
I have knowing someone else in the world was merry.
Have you ever felt the breeze on you’re face soft and cold,
I have with my aunt who is stubborn and old.

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

1 posted 2008-07-16 12:46 PM

I liked your poem, but it was hard to understand what I was reading. But after reading it several times, I kinda got it. If you add punctuation to your poem, I'm sure it'll be less confusing.
-Andrew

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