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Elias Nevermore
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 152

0 posted 2008-07-12 05:41 PM

A heart, so pure, yet so very fragile,
can be swayed as time passes on
to become tainted by the darkness
lingering in the depths of our soul.

A quiet whisper, a lingering thought
seem to influence us from time to time,
appearing when we lose sense of ourselves
to rid us of our conceptions on life.

A still moment, a small instant in time,
shows itself in our darkest hours
to enlighten us on what we must do
so that we may extinguish the fear inside

"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-07-14 12:05 PM

Hey Elias!! Its been a long time! Where have you been?

...

Back to the poem, this line is my favorite!!

"A still moment, a small instant in time,
shows itself in our darkest hours
to enlighten us on what we must do
so that we may extinguish the fear inside"

What a masterpeice!!

Great to have you back!!

~Zach~

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

2 posted 2008-07-14 01:30 PM

masterpiece???.....i dont even think that does it justice. its amazingly brilliant to say the least.

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

3 posted 2008-07-15 10:25 PM

Elias, this is amazing! the second stanza is definitely my fave. Going in my library!

Cierra

Elias Nevermore
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 152

4 posted 2008-07-15 11:08 PM

Thank you all for your comments. Their is an error in the text which I would like to resolve.

Instead of the word "conceptions" in the last line second stanza, there should be the word "misconceptions".

-Elias

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

5 posted 2008-07-16 03:20 PM

Wow, I really really liked this.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

Love_Skull
Junior Member

since 2008-07-15

Posts 44

6 posted 2008-07-21 10:52 PM

this is a really good poem!i really liked it!

Leah

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

7 posted 2008-07-26 10:46 PM

Man, it's been a while! Nice to see you writing again! Anyway, I loved this one! Your words are always so carefully chosen!

There is power in the pen.

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