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Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

0 posted 2008-07-10 06:39 PM

Broken things; [Are] Puzzle Pieces

Step lightly; Something is broken
Tread softly; there is glass
And more.

An Ace in your hand is greater than Two up their sleeves.
So don't Cheat.
You won't beat Fate by cutting your self.

Stare at the pieces; One mess: too many.
Or...
Pick up the Pieces; A Puzzle: several Mysteries.

Better yet...
Match the pieces together;
Your Life.

7/10/08

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2008-07-10 07:56 PM

I'll be honest and say that your poems confuse me lol. This one made more sense then some of the others I've read but your way of wording things is different than mine I guess. Anyway, just 'cause I couldn't understand it that doesn't mean I don't like it. Great job.

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.."
{~Emily~}

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2008-07-10 10:04 PM

I really liked this...the images that your words put into my mind were amazing.

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

3 posted 2008-07-11 12:33 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting! ^^ If my meaning was too obscure, I'll tell you this once: It's basically telling someone to get a grip and stop abusing theirselves.

There is power in the pen.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

4 posted 2008-07-11 10:48 AM

I agree with BritanyJ and Emily, the pictures in my head made sense but the words on the screen somewhat confused me. But now I understand pretty much all of it. Loved it.

~*Julianna*~

"This lullaby is only a few words
A simple run of chords
Quiet here in this spare room
But only you can hear it, hear it..."
-Sara

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

5 posted 2008-07-11 12:14 PM

its definatly out of the ordinary and i loved it.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

6 posted 2008-07-12 10:43 AM

wow i usually don't go in for stuff like this, but i just love whatever you write. i liked it a lot. i like the way you created it- jagged. nice effect.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

apes531
Junior Member

since 2008-07-23

Posts 35

7 posted 2008-07-27 09:28 PM

i enjoyed this read.. made me think a little bit..

(comment and tell me what you think of my poems im new here)

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

8 posted 2008-07-27 09:39 PM

Your poem struck the truth. Your words seemed steped in meaning

Thank you. Becca-Jade

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

9 posted 2008-07-29 02:59 PM

Wow. It's really different, but i like that.
I think the others are right. It seems confusing on page, but at the same time...not?
Anyway. Good job.

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