Falling out of love.. (another submition to the challenege)

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Falling out of love.. (another submition to the challenege)

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-07-08 12:00 PM

Here we go again.
Down the same road.
Look back in memories.
Back in the times of old.

I knew the love was phony
Way back from the start.
There was no need to say any lies.
But you had to break a heart.

At the time I thought back
And said I was in love
What a fool I was?
How could you let this happen, Allmighty power up above?

I bet you saw this coming.
But didn't say a word.
Didn't send an angel..
To carry me off like a bird..

You let me hurt inside.
Someday's you can be cruel
But I will not forget.
That your the one who rules.

I brought this hurt upon myself.
Theres no other one to blame
But that girl wasn't right for me.
But why am I in shame?

Was this my screw up?
Did I mess up big time?
Could this be falling out of love?
Is there no reason to this rhyme?

But I'll forget my past.
I need to start a new.
No need to speak any lies.
Its not worth bothering to see you.

But now I know the symptoms of falling out of love.
No need to go back into that place.
No need to feel the feelings.
And no need to see your lying face.
"Yeah I changed alot in this poem.. And I think it was for the worse.. What do you guys think?"

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

1 posted 2008-07-08 01:33 PM

I think your doing just fine. Better then fine at that. Keep it up...oh, and good poem by the way.

~*Julianna*~

"This lullaby is only a few words
A simple run of chords
Quiet here in this spare room
But you can hear it, hear it
Wherever you m

Baby_Girl
Junior Member

since 2008-05-10

Posts 21
OH, United States

2 posted 2008-07-08 02:40 PM

Really liked this...also welcome to piptalk...i cant wait to see more of ur work
~Kalysta~

Baby~Girl

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