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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2008-06-26 01:46 AM



I get your call
I sneak out my window
on this cool night
I feel the wind blow

I get into your jeep
I can tell by your face
it's just one of those times
my heart will erase

this is always how we meet
i'm just another lay
feeling like a one night stand
it's how you end my day

it doesnt matter that we're going steady
if I just feel like your good time
I know I want more from you
but it's a mountain I cant climb

I hate that when you phone
I'm at your beck and call
when for days on end
I dont hear from you at all

I know I can do better
than this crap I get from you
but it's all I can handle
all I can do..

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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Clockwork_Orange
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1 posted 2008-06-26 02:28 PM


i think  this one great poem because it captures what you were trying to get across very well. i love it.
hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2008-06-27 02:32 PM


thanx Bryan
BrittanyJ
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3 posted 2008-06-30 02:29 PM


Wow hunnie this is really good...and really sad at the same time. I like it, very nice

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Baby_Girl
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4 posted 2008-06-30 04:04 PM


Really like it. I went through almost the exact thing about 4 months ago.

Baby~Girl

RedNail
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5 posted 2008-06-30 04:13 PM


Beautiful and sad.. Love it.
Dark Star
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6 posted 2008-08-22 08:02 PM


sadness

xoxo-Star

Earl Robertson
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7 posted 2008-08-22 10:01 PM


Nice poem, real sad though. I'm grinding my teeth at your boyfriend whoever he is.

Library

Be who you are
And say what you feel
'Cause those who mind don't matter
And those who matter don't mind
-Dr Suess

racer-boy
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since 2008-08-31
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8 posted 2008-09-01 12:43 PM


great poem. and if u dont mind me saying so, your bf doesnt deserve you.

live now

XoDenisseoX
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9 posted 2008-09-04 08:34 PM


that guy doesnt deserve you, im sure for many reason plus the fact that your a very talented writer sweetie! keep it up
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