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HersheyKiss
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0 posted 2008-06-20 03:39 PM


Take A Walk With Me.

When you close your eyes, tell me what do you see?
Come hold my hand and take a walk with me
Down a long dark corridor, with doors shut tight
I will open them up, just for you tonight

Let’s open up the door marked number one
Take a peek inside, please try not to run
The demons screech out, yelling one by one
Come in here, come join in the fun

Sex and porn, a room full of abuse
But don’t shout out, because it’s no use
No-one will come when you scream
Just lie there quietly; it’s all a bad dream

Door number two is full of jokes
Aimed at a girl, whose tears do choke
She tries so hard to please and be accepted
Yet is made to feel worthless and feels rejected

Now is this safe? Door number three
There’s another young girl, who looks just like me
She has her own demons and pain to bear
Yet deep down inside, I know she does care

Door number four, how bad can this be?
Should have been a life that was so free
And yet more demons they do appear
Go away little girl, you are not welcome here

Door number five is the drunk she has faced
Door number six is still firmly shut and braced
Number seven is dark and I can’t see
No tale to tell, not yet for me

Let’s close all the doors now and turn and leave
I’ve seen the demons and felt them breathe
But here they all are now, alive and real
Maybe its time to tell them exactly how I feel

Deep down I am hurting and I am not strong
What you did to me was totally wrong
I put on a smile to hide my pain
But now I am tired of playing this game

There are so many things I do want to say
And this says a lot, in my own little way
But what’s the point, for it won’t change the past
Only for this little girl, it is the last

So I take her hand and lead her away
To a better future, out of harms way

© Copyright 2008 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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1 posted 2008-06-20 04:02 PM


Danielle, this poem is so true for many people. It speaks loudly and is very deep. Amazing poem, amazing poet. Keep it up! Library.

~*Julianna*~

Six Semper Tyrannas - Thus always to tyrants...

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
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Neverland
2 posted 2008-06-20 04:38 PM


Hun, once again you have mastered this. You are very talented and I am always amazed by how much emotion you can include in your poetry. Fantastic write, and even though you think you can't, stay strong. Library,

ps. How's Jake??

           {~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.."
{~Emily~}

Earl Robertson
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3 posted 2008-06-20 05:54 PM


This is amazing. It speaks to me on so many levels...I think I'll send this to a friend...or maybe I shouldn't.

It's going in my library regardless.

There's a fine line between Genius and Insanity
I have Erased that Line
-Mark Paron

HersheyKiss
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4 posted 2008-06-20 08:12 PM


thanks guys thing is its really hard to stay strong i just  cant do it anymore.  Emily Jakes getting better very slowly but doing good. He still has major trama to his head and ribs and stuff but he's healing. He's probably going to stay in the hospital for another week or so.
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5 posted 2008-06-20 08:15 PM


Danielle you amaze me... you are so strong I dont think I could handle what you are going through
Krysti

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6 posted 2008-06-20 09:36 PM


I'm crying here Danielle.. You amaze and stunn me with your talent in writing.. but I'm crying for you..I'm glad you are doing better..

But just in case.. I'll be praying for you.

May God protect you..

"It might be easy to fall for someone but it's also easy to break a heart." - Zach Booker.

graeshine2006
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7 posted 2008-06-20 11:23 PM


You are a very talented girl, woman.  I am completely blown away and amazed.  And of course, I wish you the best in all you do and all you go through.
Clockwork_Orange
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8 posted 2008-06-23 05:55 PM


Let’s close all the doors now and turn and leave
I’ve seen the demons and felt them breathe
But here they all are now, alive and real
Maybe its time to tell them exactly how I feel
this is amazing. my faveorite part

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