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My weaknesses
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My weaknesses |
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spiderilia Junior Member
since 2008-04-24
Posts 21Israel |
weaknesses all of those things I want for you to know the weaknesses Im too afraid to show my heart, it stops, my breathing is too slow all of those dreams I had, so far avay they go... my rhymes are broken, no, not anymore the flow I need to hear it one more time, your sweet and gentle "no" we dont have any chance, oh god this is the hardest blow I miss you in my life, I miss your look, I miss you so those are the feelings that I always stow the feelings that I want for you to know the weaknesses I'll never show, I'll never show... something I wrote a mounth ago... =P P.S. on my 18th birthday you werent there on my 18th birthday I said "I dont care" on my 18th birthday I felt it for the first time on my 18th birthday I thought o my firsst rhyme on my 18th birthday I dont know how it fare but on my 18th birthday you werent there... I dont want to open a new topic for this one... so Ill just add it here... =P |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
OMG! i really like your first poem.i know how you feel. But your second one wasn't that bad.. it was good though.. Great write ~Zach~ |
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