Left Alone In The Spotlight (a lonley duet with myself)

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Teen Poetry #8

Left Alone In The Spotlight (a lonley duet with myself)

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-05-11 10:53 AM

this sonnet of a broken heart
beats into the air
half of this duet is sung
because only half of the two are there
the other half is gone
lost inside thier fear
and im here on this empty stage
wishing to disapear
sweating through the spotlight
the pressure grows with ease
i thought that you would help me out
because you made me believe
but once again ill fake it
and fall right on my face
forget those solemn words i spoke
of you in perfect grace

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-05-11 11:35 AM

Awwe this is sad.. I like it.. and if you ever wanted to duet with anyone.. im here! lol well back to this master peice i think it was pretty good.. although some parts didn't make sence or just didn't fit in to your story line.. But otherwise Great job!!

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2008-05-11 11:18 PM

This is amazing.. speechless person here..

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

3 posted 2008-05-11 11:33 PM

This is another amazing poem. = ] You're really incredible. One of your many callings. I like the symbolism with the stage, very nice and dramatic. Excellent job.

-K

Do the day, and let the day do you. - S. King

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

4 posted 2008-05-12 09:58 AM

This was perfect! an Absolute MASTERPEICE!!!

Not exactly sure what Zach meant about parts that didn't make sence, the whole thing was amazing!

"We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

5 posted 2008-05-12 03:21 PM

tear jerking drama and bitter sweet, i really enjoyed it.

and yes for a duet i am here as well.

kk hugs

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